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ژانویه 18, 2020

نمونه رایتینگ تصحیح شده ایلتس

3 راهکار جهت پاسخگویی به سؤالات لیسنینگ آزمون آیلتس

در متن زیر یک نمونه رایتینگ نگارش و آنالیز شده ایلتس آورده شده است:

 

صورت سوال:

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowaday(nowadays) most of the young generation who wants to choose a field to study at univesity to crea(create)t their future have a big challenge in their mind about which field is best for them?(better not use question mark in our text) it is an important decision in lif(life) that every body(everybody) should think twice about it.

Introduction:

ساختار و چهارچوب مناسب. در دوجمله و در مجموع49 کلمه نوشته شده که بسیار مناسب است.

در برخی جاها دنبال کردن متن توسط خواننده سخت است (نمره coherence). ایرادات املایی بالاست.

 

Noboday(nobody) can make a good decision without others(other’s) help and some time(sometimes) choosing wrong way(a wrong way) can make your life in bad situation(a bad situation) and it could make lots of problem such as econmical problem(an economical problem) or family problem(article check) for married(marriage) or in relation people(relationships). for example(,) when a person like to work in a group or team working must choose a job with  temporary client would not feel good of his/her job and always feel tired of what he/she doing.so after finish(finishing) his/her work must spend lots of time to get recoverd and it will waste time(it will be a waste of time).

Main 1:

طول متن 94 کمله است که مناسب است.

ایرادات املایی و گرامری زیاد. دلایل آورده شده چندان مناسب نیست.

In the other hand(on the other hand)(,) some people choose a field at university to earn good money in their life although they dont like it(very simple and hard to understand) but it could be worth(it would worth it) because after short period of doing this job they have enough money to do what they like for making them satisfied and feel comfortable. But we have to be aware of the mental problem and side effect(effects) of doing unlikely job(?) and its impact on their life.

 

In conclusion(,) people must think carefully about this part of life for choosing what they should study.parent can help them(students) in a good(need a noun) but not to force them to do it.there are many psychological test that people could to help them befor choosing what they should study for a better life.

نمره نهایی: اگرچه نکاتی مثل تعداد کلمات و رعایت چهارچوب مناسب در هر پاراگراف در این متن رعایت شده اما به دلیل ایرادات املایی و گرامری بالا و همچنین استفاده از لغات ساده و عدم رعایت پیوستگی متن، نمره داده شده به این متن 5 – 5.5 خواهد بود.

 

 

 

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